Great blurb! I'm wondering if these could perhaps be made less specific to cut down wording a smidgen...
"...that should have been made in the first Special Edition, but gives us a whole new vision for the movie, tying it to the rest of the Star Wars saga while correcting many of the excesses of the original Special Edition."
Do the improvements not apply to both/all the special editions of SW:ANH and not just the "first," "original" special edition? Just a thought that popped into my head while reading it. If too nitpicky then just ignore me here.
Again, great blurb! 