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Post #306305

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ron2112
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STAR WARS: EP IV 2004 REVISITED ADYWAN *1080p HD VERSION NOW IN PRODUCTION
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Date created
14-Jan-2008, 2:07 PM
I know you specifically asked Adywan for his feedback, but may I offer one suggestion?

"...while correcting much of the excesses of the original Special Edition."

"Much" isn't quite correct... "many" would be a better choice. (Or "most" but I like "many" better.) You generally wouldn't use "much" to describe a countable quantity. "Much of what I wear is black, but many of my socks are white."

Just my two cents. The rest of it sounds great.

Ron Moses