EXCELLENT storytelling and flow! I really like your style of editing and your ideas. I have 3 small suggestions.
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1) Cut :38 - :43. This segment contains 4 short shots of Anakin, but the cuts are quick and ubrubt. Cut the two middle shots, as pretty as they are, and the bookends complete the intention of the shot. This also would then mirror the Padme shots prior like this.
Padma: Long Shot, Close up - Anakin: Long shot, Close Up
2) Cut 1:35 - 1:38. This is the third City Shot. The connection has already been established, and this inturrupts the exit from this emotional scene. With out this shot, it plays out like this, starting with the above sequence.
Part 1 Establishs the deep thought> Padme: Long Shot, Close up - Anakin: Long shot, Close Up
Part 2 Establishes the Communication across the city> Padme: Long Shot, Close up, City Shot - Anakin: Long shot, Behind shot (emphasis on Anakin's turmoil), Close Up, City Shot
Part 3 Now Communicating, Establishes the Emotion> Padme: Close Up (Showing Fear) - Anakin: Close Up (Showing Pain)
Part 4 The Exit> Padme: Lowers Head - Anakin: Turns to Leave Decision Made.
I hope that makes sense, I would have re-edited it, but I wouldn't have the time until tomorrow.
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3) When Anakin attacks Mace, he says: "You can't", then just chops off Maces Arm. I think it's important to add the line "I need Him!" It just connects the dots for the average viewer.
I can't wait to see the rest of your edit!