Originally posted by: see you auntie
I've got no criticism apart from a couple of spelling errors.

Yeah thanks for pointing that out, the transcription wasn't typed up by me and I didn't realise how many typos were in it.

The biggest strength about this early draft is that Obi Wan is in the Qui Gon role. Its Obi Wan who uncovers the invasion, rescues the queen, meets Anakin, decides to train him, wins his freedom and presents him to the Jedi council. Kenobi has a strong relationship with Anakin as a father figure, he has a strong relationship with Padme, and he also is more developed as a character. He's in his thirties, a full Jedi, bold in many ways but also a good role model. It would have strengthened the series so much because it has a trickle-down effect into all the character relationships and into the next films, which also meant that AOTC could have been free to take more time developing characters since there was no more introductions needed. You can see in the dialog exerpts that the dialog is no better than the final film, and of course Palpatine's whole arc is non-existant--he just shows up at the end and says "hey look I'm supreme chancellor now!" But as a first draft these things obviously could have been worked out and developed, and its great the way Jar Jar is semi-normal and actually becomes a real warrior in the end battle--a character arc, look at that. Theres also some neat bits like Theed city actually being assaulted and us seeing the people suffering, and I like the way we actually witness Anakin being accepted into the Jedi at the end.
The movie is still a bit dissapointing, but only in a "well thats not as good as the OT" way instead of "what the hell was that piece of shit?". I think if Lucas gave this draft to a real writer that could have made the characters real, the plot more interesting and the drama a bit more hevfty that the film could have surpassed ROTJ.