Post #29717

Author: motti_soL
Parent topic: Make fun of shimraa thread and other stuff we can think of!
Link to post in topic: https://originaltrilogy.com/post/id/29717/action/topic#29717
Date created: 19-Jan-2004, 3:22 AM

lose the "swoosh thud swoosh thud" shimmy... it has no place in that poem. just lose that line and leave the last line "an army passes in the night" as a separate one.

other than that its good.

on another note:

*hits shimmy in the back of the head with his right hand THWAP!

LMFAO!!!! just felt like it... and this is the place!!!

good to be back, shimmy!!!!