-I like the "Swords" line; it shows Dooku's high class to use such an antiquated term. That's how I see it anyway.
-I understand why you'd think about cutting the "I sense great fear..." line but I wouldn't for a couple of reasons: 1) It's one of Dooku's few lines in the film, and 2) It would break up the great shot of them in their saber lock. The prequels didn't have enough of these sustained, lightsaber locks IMO.
-While I see the merits of Anakin getting carried away and immediately killing Dooku, and your edits for this are done well, I personally think the "Kill him now" and Dooku's stunned look serves as a necessary resolution to Dooku's role as Palpatine's apprentice.
In a nutshell, the more Christopher Lee the better.