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Post #293529

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Saintheart
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Episode II: Shroud of the Dark Side (the TM edit) (Released)
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26-Jul-2007, 10:50 PM
Hi, guys, I'm new here, please don't eat me ...

...Seriously, I don't know if this has already been covered or resolved, but it's about the elimination of the Yoda + Younglings scene ... or specifically, the "Mathter? Becauth thomeone erathed it from the archive memory" aspect of it. I had a thought on this. The scene is indeed a charming little one, and I think a cool one in that you've got Obi-Wan wandering around the galaxy on foot in a "Star Map" that works rather nicely. The problem, of course, is the jarring aspect of a four-year-old out-thinking one of the smartest Jedi Knights in the Order. (Of course, that probably explains how the Jedi got wiped out, but I digress...).

Maybe 90% of the scene doesn't have to be cut. Consider:

(1) Obi-Wan comes to Yoda for assistance, not the kids.
(2) It's only Yoda who turns Obi-Wan's problem a schoolyard lesson (and, incidentally, embarrassing the hell out of Obi-Wan at the same time).

So maybe it can be razored like this:

(1) Scene proceeds as normal up to --
YODA: How can I help, Obi-Wan?
OBI-WAN: I'm searching for a planet, but it's not in the archives, blah, blah, blah.

(2) You then cut out Yoda's aside to the kids that Obi-Wan's lost a planet, how embarrassing. Instead, go straight to "Liam, the shades", and mute the part of Yoda's line at "Clearrr your minds." This leaves in the fact of the map reader's existence, eliminates the idea that the class is being asked to consider the question from the start, and explains the younglings' movements to surround Yoda.

(3) Scene then proceeds as in the original up to the part where Obi-Wan says "Gravity is pulling all the stars in the area to this spot." You then loop in "Dangerous and disturbing this puzzle is" from Yoda offscreen, and cut to a shot of Yoda saying "Go to the centre of gravity's pull, and find your wayward planet you will." It isn't a perfect idea, but to my mind it establishes Yoda as much more decisive and with an immediate answer for Obi-Wan. And you get rid of the youngling question, response, and Yoda's silly line about how wonderful the mind of a child is.

(4) Finally, you continue the scene as earlier, but to avoid the repeated "Dangerous and disturbing this puzzle is", you cut straight from Obi-Wan's assertion that it's impossible to eliminate files from the archives to Yoda's line that only a Jedi could have erased those files, and that he'll meditate on it. It hopefully makes the scene more sinister and foreboding ... maybe even sets up for a payoff in Episode III if done right ... ?

Just an idea.