Cool ideas, here, GM. The vision idea is interesting. Two things on the audio end of it: 1) The way you've mixed and reverbed Qui-Gon and Yoda's lines thus far makes it sound more like Yoda is remembering these things. I think a bit of a balance between what ADM did and what you have would probably make it more clear that that's what's going on. (I love that "You doubt the prophecy?" line, although I also like ADM's line selection as well--it would be nice to see both aspects of Yoda's current state addressed by Qui-Gon: guilt, like in ADM's, and doubt, like in yours).
The second thing is: would it be possible to edit Yoda's line to be "A prophecy could have been misread"?
That and "Around the survivors, a perimeter create" are probably the most annoying lines from Yoda. In fact, if it could be done, I think some un-inversion throughout the PT would be good. It just got to be overkill. I'm amazed when I look back at the OT, and how normally Yoda speaks so much of the time.I love your idea for Obi-Wan checking on Padme in the ship!
I did notice an improvement in having Bail's line more prominent here; that's good, in that it's supposed to disrupt Yoda's meditation and vision.
That's about all I have for now. Good work, GM! Keep going!
