One thing I realized is why exactly I love that shot of the Naboo Star Skiff leaving Mustafar... it's because it really helps the scene along. You have that whole sequence with Padme, then you have this long shot of the skiff taking off (really fast compared to how it lands I might add) and flying away...
then this long shot of Obi-Wan sitting in the cockpit...thinking. You need something to break that up.
I toyed around with a few versions. In the one I have here, you'll see that I chose to have the shot of the ship flying away, a backwards shot of a slight pull in to mustafar (making it a slow pull out) then a slight fade shot to Obi-Wan thinking.
I thought of maybe breaking up the long take off shot with the slight pull out... if anyone knows of a quick way to insert a pic of the skiff let me know... I tried finding a good HQ pic of the skiff maybe on a white background ( that I coudl then paint green and separate the image) but I couldn't find anything...
Then I'd finish the shot of it flying away... and by then, I'd have used up some of the time of Obi-Wan thinking... (if I simply leave the audio track alone) which then fixes it all... but I couldn't find a pic of the skiff so I decided on what I have here for now.
One of the things I've been doing is really paying attention to the little moments that the actors create with their expressions. For instance, after Padme asks "Is Anakin alright?," you se a shot of Obi-Wan looking at her... then he almost winces away... realizing what he's done.
I decided to highlight this by adding in a little bit of dialogue of just padme, almost breathlessly saying "Anakin"...then some small breaths.... I have to play with her line a bit. This is a rough edit. I'm trying to find a good take of her saying it... once I do, I'm going to isolate it, rip it from the dvd as a wav (as right now the audio isn't that high in quality) and then edit it... the artifacts you're hearing are because of the slightly lower quality.
I also played with the visions, trying to make them a little bit better on their disolves and such.
Also, If I want the line "You still have much to learn my apprentice" where I put it, I decided I needed to extend the shot of Yoda opening his eyes, so I did that by stretching out that part of the shot and after the line, letting it go back to its original speed.
Let me know what you all think. I'm about to begin work on the actual birth itself... so that's coming up soon... phew...so much to do! lol
You can download my edit here:
Part 4 Version 3