what is before we cut to Obi-Wan traveling to the ship... we cut back to coruscant, and then when we come back... try to edit some of the shots and make it look like Obi-Wan went to the base of the lava-fall to look for anakin, and finds the lightsaber...and then walks away with it...?
You could incorporate the shot of the base of the lava-fall, then the shot of the bugs walking along the bank... and then show Obi-Wan standing near the lava's edge, picking up the lightsaber, looking out, and walking away?
Maybe incorporate some of the Lament music (Immolation) and then also incorporate some of the shots of Palpatine's arrival...
So then it cuts to him walking to Padme's ship... more time has elapsed... and it really would help change the pace of the film.. not to mention solve the lightsaber problem.
EDIT
So I've finished part II and part III. I decided, becuase of youtube's time requirements, to separate the talking from the beinning of this and make that part II and the fighting part III.
Interestingly enough, I found a few things worth editing from the conversation and it works really well, you almost don't notice the changes.
You can download it here:
Part II version 4
You can view it on youtube here:
Part II version 4 On Youtube
List of changes from Part II
(This picks up directly where the last one left off)
01) The reaction that Anakin gives when Padme says that Obi-Wan wants to help them after telling him that "He knows" is best described as... sheepish and girly. Watching it, I couldn't help but wonder what the fuck Haydn was thinking and why it was left in there lol...
It's such a strange reaction "He wants to help you." Anakin smiles almost like he's just been told Obi-Wan loves him lol... and his head kinda bobs, he looks down, then his eyes look back up... it's just a HORRIBLE reaction. So I replace it with a shot from earlier of him simply looking down. I also shorten the amount of time on the shot.
02) I remove the extended close up of Padme lying lifeless on the ground and instead cut from Obi-Wan glancing down at her body to the shot of Anakin saying his line "You turned her against me!"
03) I remove Anakin saying "If you're not with me-" and simply leave "Then you're my enemy.
04) I remove the ironic line "Only a sith deals in absolutes" and leave "I will do what I must."
End of Part II
Part III, I had a bit of trouble with. I'm still tweaking bits and pieces so let me know what you all think.
You can download it here:
Part III version 1
You can view it on YouTube here:
(Not yet)
Changes made to Part III
(This jumps in right where part II leaves off)
01) I remove some of the redundant and faulty shots of Anakin and Obi-Wan fighting showing Padme' not where she is.
02) Cut to Yoda and Palpatine fighting
03) Cut back to Obi-Wan and anakin fighting on mustafar after Sidious snarl
04) I changed where this cut to the fighting in the middle of the room sequence begins so the musical change isn't so quick.
05) I replace the shot of them destroying the console
06) I cut from right after Obi-Wan gets kicked in the face to Yoda jumping down to fight sidious
07) I cut early from when yoda falls on a senator pod.
08) Cut to Sidious pulling a pod from the housing
09) Cut to the second half of the yoda shot showing yoda looking up at the pod
10) Cut to the pod being thrown and yoda stopping it
11) I remove the show of sidious laughing this goes to sidious jumping and looking around for yoda
12) CUt to Obi-Wan and Anakin fighting on the balancing part with the raw sfx from the mixups on starwars.com, and the DOTF from my complete score. Cut early as Obi-Wan jumps down
13) Cut to Yoda jumping up to fightin Sidious.
14) I decided to move Yoda falling back to the original placement.
I change the order of the shots though, showing Yoda's coat falling.
15) Cut to Palpatine dangling and laughing
16) Cut to Yoda looking up at the coat
17) Cut back to mustafar with some of the footage from the volcano explosion sequence to add more to this. (Heroes Collide music layered with raw sfx from mashups)
18) CUt to Anakin hitting obi-wan and the rest of the "Heroes Collide" sequence finishes.
19) I repeat a shot of Obi-wan and anakin struggling (but flipped) with just sfx playing
20) Cut to an exterior Senate chambers shot from Episode II with sfx from a deleted scene in Episode III the apropriate music playing to go into
21) Interior shot of Palpatine being told that yoda is mising.
22) Cut some of Palps lines to show him looking off in the distance.
23) Cut to Yoda crawling and only saying "Hurry"
24) Bail saying his lines
25) cut to yoda opening the hatch and jumping into Bails ship.
26) Cut to an exterior shot of mustfar from when the planet is first shown with the apropo music playing and sfx layared.
27) cut to Obi-Wan and anakin fighting and their lightsabers being forced down onto the arm
28) cut to a shot of the volcano erupting.
29) Cut to the shot of the lava flowing ontop of the arm.
30) splice the two shots of the arm failing together (because of the removal of the volcano shot)
31) movement of the two sequences together of the arm floating in the lava. The music is also fixed for this.
32) Shortening of a shot of Obi-Wan watching the arm go over the falls.
33) Shortening of a shot of the droid that Anakin lands on being confused.
34) cutting earlier to Obi-Wans line saying "I have failed you."
35) Cutting early to Anakins line "The Jedi are Evil"
37) Cutting early to Anakin's line "This is the end for you my master."
38) Removal of a shot of anakin floating and cutting early to his line "You underestimate my power."
39) removal of a shot of Obi-Wan reacting to Anakin's jump.
40) adding a shot of Anakin looking up at OBi-Wan
41) Cut to Obi-Wan saying "You were my brother Anakin."
42) Cut to Anakin saying "I hate you."
43) Cut to Obi-Wan walking away and picking up the lightsaber.
44) CUt to Anakin catching on Fire
ENd of Part III... there was a small error I have to fix... but I got the fight to just under 10 minutes...not bad... I cut out something like...5 minutes if I remember right...