Originally posted by: Marvolo
1.Cut the part where Anikan ignites his saber and attempts to run and jump from the structure. Make it so that he swings back on to the structure and before he can even attempt to run and jump off it he plummets down the lava fall.
I only left it because I liked what it showed of the arm and the arms position on the lava-fall. You get a real sense that it's gone over the cliff.
I was just throwing it together to see what it would look like. I don't have Adobe After Effects (wish very greatly that I did lol)... so that would be the job of... someone else lol
3. After you have the shot that pulls away from the lava fall I would cut Obi-Wan's reaction shots and go straight to volcanoe erupting shot and then to Obi-Wan approaching the ship. The reason for this is because you already have two reaction shots from Obi-Wan before you have the pull out shot and don't really need two more. If you don't want to remove these shots at least get rid of or replace the last shot of Obi-Wan where he is holding his ignited lightsaber right before the volcanoe shot. It just doesn't flow naturally with the other reaction shots, because they are close up facial shots and that is a full body shot. I understand the emotion that is supposed to be portrayed by Obi-Wan's body stance, but it feels awkward among the other reaction shots.
1.Cut the part where Anikan ignites his saber and attempts to run and jump from the structure. Make it so that he swings back on to the structure and before he can even attempt to run and jump off it he plummets down the lava fall.
I only left it because I liked what it showed of the arm and the arms position on the lava-fall. You get a real sense that it's gone over the cliff.
2. Not really a nit pick but when you pull away from the falls after Anikan has fallen down the falls you can see the structure still floating down the lava river in the background. This can be removed with Adobe After Effects.
I was just throwing it together to see what it would look like. I don't have Adobe After Effects (wish very greatly that I did lol)... so that would be the job of... someone else lol
3. After you have the shot that pulls away from the lava fall I would cut Obi-Wan's reaction shots and go straight to volcanoe erupting shot and then to Obi-Wan approaching the ship. The reason for this is because you already have two reaction shots from Obi-Wan before you have the pull out shot and don't really need two more. If you don't want to remove these shots at least get rid of or replace the last shot of Obi-Wan where he is holding his ignited lightsaber right before the volcanoe shot. It just doesn't flow naturally with the other reaction shots, because they are close up facial shots and that is a full body shot. I understand the emotion that is supposed to be portrayed by Obi-Wan's body stance, but it feels awkward among the other reaction shots.
As you said, there are several good reaction shots... I included all of them to test them all... have them all IN the video and then narrow it down to the ones likes, or the ones preferred.
Again, just tossing it together.
Personally, after watching it again, I'm really not that big of a fan of the music track I chose. I WAS trying to find something of Battle of the Heroes, but there isn't much that conveys the emotion I was going for. Leaving the music intact for the most part would work, but it would have to end abruptly... and then somehow transition to the second half of "The Immolation Scene" without being too awkward.
And no one commented on the edits I did in the end of this sequence lol