Originally posted by: darkhelmet
1) Since you cut footage of the space battle in to allow Anakin and Obi time to get to the observation deck, how about cutting to the wide shot of the Chancellor watching the battle and then to A and O coming out of the elevator. It might create a better narrative tie between the almost random battle footage and the next scene.
Thats actually a really good idea. I was originally trying for the editing style seen in ROTJ where it jumps back from battle to battle to battle, but I never really noticed what made that work. There was a story happening in all three battles which made the switches make sense, whereas in ROTS there is no story in the space battle once our heroes are inside making the edit random. Your idea seems to fix that. I'll give that a try and see how it works.
Originally posted by: darkhelmet
2) Is there any way you can include any more dialogue for Grievous? I really like how you made it A's and O's initiative to face Grievous, but, for the introduction of a new prominent character, we don't get a big enough dose of him to really size him up. Personally, I'm going to borrow Kerr's idea and try to cut Grievous out of my edit completely.
1) Since you cut footage of the space battle in to allow Anakin and Obi time to get to the observation deck, how about cutting to the wide shot of the Chancellor watching the battle and then to A and O coming out of the elevator. It might create a better narrative tie between the almost random battle footage and the next scene.
Thats actually a really good idea. I was originally trying for the editing style seen in ROTJ where it jumps back from battle to battle to battle, but I never really noticed what made that work. There was a story happening in all three battles which made the switches make sense, whereas in ROTS there is no story in the space battle once our heroes are inside making the edit random. Your idea seems to fix that. I'll give that a try and see how it works.
Originally posted by: darkhelmet
2) Is there any way you can include any more dialogue for Grievous? I really like how you made it A's and O's initiative to face Grievous, but, for the introduction of a new prominent character, we don't get a big enough dose of him to really size him up. Personally, I'm going to borrow Kerr's idea and try to cut Grievous out of my edit completely.
Well, I honestly felt that this was a problem with Greivous to begin with. He was never really given much of a part to play so he made little sense (unless you've seen the clone wars, which one should always assume the average viewer hasn't). I like the idea of deleting him, but I enjoyed the Clone Wars enough that I'd like to be able to keep him in for the sake of continuity. I'm hoping to give his character a bit more to do later on by filling in details, but unfortunately I don't have a lot to work with. First, I will eventually change the opening scrawl to try and explain Greivous a bit better so he's not such a suprise. Second, I've changed his dialog with the Emperor so that it seems he was in cahoots with the whole kill Dooku plan, and even to a degree the end of the separatist leaders (will post clip soon). This makes his fleeing plausible, seeing as he had at least 4 lightsabers on him from his collection yet never decides to use them, thus abandoning Palpatine without a fight. In fact, if you watch the original sequence you'll notice Greivous seems to disappear for about 2 minutes before he gets cornered. Thanks George.
Thanks again man, I've started watching your clips and so far I like what I see. I'll respond in more detail once I've seen them all.
One question for everyone, what did you think of the part where Obi-Wan's fighter gets shot? I had a couple friends who were confused by the next few seconds of footage. Thoughts?