I don't know if you're looking for comments on changes, but I thought I'd throw out a few...
1) I moved an establishing shot from Episode II of Padme's Residence to the beginning of this sequence, cutting into the normal film late in, just enough to show the pramanade.
The AOTC clip worked well, however, the shot of the pramanade went by so quick it was very jarring. I think you could easily leave the shot out all together.
2) Instead of cutting to Mustafar as Obi-Wan enters his ship, it cuts back to a shot of Padme sitting on the couch, her head hanging.
This works extremely well. However, going back to the shot of the pramanade is, again, very jarring. Why is Obi's ship just sitting there? I think it works well to end the scene with the shot of Padme. We see her thinking about all that Obi Wan has told her, and then, in the very next scene, we see what she has decided to do.
4) As the ship exits frame, I insert 2 new shots:
- The first from Episode III during the exchange between Padme in her residence and Anakin in the Jedi Temple
- The second from Episode I showing the elapse of time
(The film then cuts back in at the establishing shot of the Senate Building)
These shots flow into each other well. It feels very natural. Nicely done!
10) I cut the line "You cannot stop me. Darth Vader will become more powerful than you or I etc." through to Yoda's line about having too much faith in his apprentice and the dark side.
Yes yes! Moving straight to the fight actually works better in this case. I wish there was a way to take out Yoda's flip...
I enjoyed everything else you did in the edit...some stuff I didn't even noticed until I came back and read this thread. Again, excellent! Can't wait to see part 2!