First off, I really like the way you cut this scene. To get rid of the "I shouldn't have done that" line and palpatine statements, while still allowing it to flow, possibly cut it like this:
Leave it as is (in your cut) -
- Anakin walks over to release Palpatine from the chair, we see the arm braces disengage -
- [cut anakin saying "I Shouldn't have done that it's not the jedi way"] -
- show Palpatine standing up only for as long as it takes for him to say, "Now We must leave" [this line taken from a few cuts later where they walk away, the full line was "Now We must leave before more battle droids..."] This should work as his head is down as he speaks -
- KEEP the scene with Palpatine looking at Anakin where there is currently no dialogue in your cut. Add the quote "You did well Anakin" [this is just after Anakin cuts off Dooku's head, you had cut this scene] This would result in the stare from Anakin, as he is questioning what he has done internally.
Let me know if you think this is do-able. The only thing that may not work is the "Now We must leave" but it should sync with "it is only natural" since his head is down for most of the line.