Okay, love the work... have one quibble. You flipped the shot of Red Leader when he says "All wings report in," and in doing so "crossed the line". The ships in the previous shot start from the right of the screen and move to the left, so they are facing the left side of the screen. By flipping the shot Red Leader is now facing the right side of the screen, and it suggests he is now moving away from the rest of the ships.

This same principal was used in TESB when at the end of the film when the filmmakers flopped the shot of Admiral Piett as he approaches Vader and tells him the Falcon will be in range of the tractor beam. By flopping the shot Lucas and co created a continuity problem with Piett's rank insignia but the physics and geography of the film making process dictated that Piett approach Vader's left side as Vader was facing left on all of his close ups.

Just a little helpful suggestion.

Yancy