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Post #287496

Author
darkhelmet
Parent topic
Episode III: A Less Grievous Version (* unfinished project *)
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Date created
22-May-2007, 2:09 AM
Hey, kerr. Very cool story-telling. I love the flow of the sequence where you inserted the deleted scene "The Plot to Destroy the Jedi". I can't wait to see more. Your edit looks and sounds very promising. Can't wait to share some more of my stuff with you and the forum once I get some time.

Marvolo, I really like your idea about continuing Anakin's frustration from his farewell to Obi-wan directly to his talk with Palpatine. Lucas' lack of development and follow-through on character emotion is a major flaw which your approach improves. We never really get to finish a character thought with the original cut. Is your cut available to check out?

About Padme's apartment scene, it seems to me like something needs to be done with it since it is only tenuously tied to Anakin's vision of Padme and Obi-wan. If it wasn't simply cut out, it might be a good opportunity to see Anakin's resolve to save Padme, but maybe it could come in somewhere before Obi-wan leaves so Anakin's jealousy seems a little more real? Any thoughts?