Marvolo, I really like your idea about continuing Anakin's frustration from his farewell to Obi-wan directly to his talk with Palpatine. Lucas' lack of development and follow-through on character emotion is a major flaw which your approach improves. We never really get to finish a character thought with the original cut. Is your cut available to check out?
About Padme's apartment scene, it seems to me like something needs to be done with it since it is only tenuously tied to Anakin's vision of Padme and Obi-wan. If it wasn't simply cut out, it might be a good opportunity to see Anakin's resolve to save Padme, but maybe it could come in somewhere before Obi-wan leaves so Anakin's jealousy seems a little more real? Any thoughts?