I know there is some negativity towards Mace and his over the top antics but ive got some ideas to try make that more enjoyable. And for reference i've removed Yoda's reference to "master windu still fights on dantooine." which could have helped. Although it may be possible to reincorporate that dialogue elsewhere.
also Note that there wont be any narration at all from yoda. The story begins proper with the battle of muunilist. certain elements from the opriginal first chapter will be cut and pasted elsewhere.