If I might make a suggestion: in order to smoothe the flow of the vision sequence, perhaps you could simply continue the vision through Bail Organa's interrupting line "Excuse me, Master Yoda" and then cut directly to Yoda turning around to look at Bail. The cut in the sequence where Yoda squints in the closeup cuts too quickly.
Nice job overall, though. I didn't notice until your edit made it apparent, but C3PO pilots from the wrong side when he and Obi-wan leave Mustafar! Nice continuity catch! Also, the swell of music over Padme's body in the hospital to close out the scene is so-o-o-o powerful. I noticed you used the same shot of Yoda twice in that scene. Have you thought of using the wider shot for the 2nd Yoda for shot variety instead?
Originally posted by: GoodMusicianThe only thing is I didn't want to show Vader becuase I kinda wanted Vader to almost be a surprise in Episode IV...like "Oh? Who's this?"
Yeah, I agree. It clues the audience into what the fate of Anakin might have been, but it doesn't answer it in IV. The audience still gets to learn the revelation along with Luke in V.
You and I are coming at Episode 3 from different vantage points as to what's important when in the overarching saga, but it seems you've got a good story and drama sense. Nice job!
EDIT: Just watched Marvolo's clip! (thanks for posting the link again, C3PX.) Maybe you could fuse the Batman Begins dialogue with the Qui-Gon lines you have already used for a fuller Qui-Gon communication to Yoda.