Glad to see you're back at it. I've checked out your clip, so lemme share some thoughts:
I was confused by your removal of Obi Wan's "You have done that yourself". Do you have a problem with that line? I quite like it.
The pace of the battle between Obi Wan and Anakin was much improved. I really enjoyed the removal of the bad dialog while lava surfing.
But once Anakin loses his limbs, the pace started to wander. Why doesn't Obi Wan pick up Anakin's saber? Why does he walk off before Anakin gets burnt?
I'm not so sure about your editing of the Yoda & Palpatine fight. I know you're trying to cut the sub-par parts, but it seems hard to understand how they get from dueling on the podium to throwing pods. In my opinion, this fight was superfluous, and poorly executed by Lucas. So you don't have too much to work with. (And can anyone tell me what's up with Yoda's cloak falling down? Is that supposed to signify something?)
The ending was just too rushed for me. I think you're probably trying to retain some of the surprises of the OT, but it felt too abrupt, and provided little to no closure on too many points. We go straight from seeing Padme in the medical center to her funeral. If you really want to cut things short, I suggest cutting the medical center scene completely.