I've gotten about 91 pages into this, and I must say this is an extremely well-written work. I'm a technical writer, and I am just really impressed with your writing ability. There are a few places where I found things to be slightly repetitive, but I think your intention was to really drive home a few points.
Since this will not be published or sold, would you consider adding some pictures to a future version? For example, showing early concept drawings, pictures of The Lightning, pictures of Buster Crabbe as Buck Rodgers or Flash Gordon. I think that would really put this over the top and make it virtually indistinguishable from a real published work.
I've also read the appendix on the Journal of the Whills as well as your article on the new findings. I was wondering if this had occurred to you:
Pollock: "The story of Mace Windu, a revered Jedi-bendu of Opuchi who was related to Usby C.J. Thape, padawaan learner to the famed Jedi."
Bouzereau: "...about 'Mace Windy, a revered Jedi Bendu of Opuchi,' as told by 'C.J. Thorpe, Padawaan learner of the famed Jedi.'"
Consider that "related to Usby C.J. Thape" may not describe a relative, but instead may be just another way of saying "told to us by C.J. Thape". If this quote was originally culled from hand-written notes, I can see how "us by" may have become "Usby". So I am wondering if the Bouzereau quote is somehow more accurate, regardless of the mis-spellings.
Ultimately, I am curious if your work on this book had anything to do with your feelings of being "finished" with Star Wars, which you recently expressed in the End of Star Wars thread.