I had a read through the entire thread and the only other comment I had is:
Originally posted by: adywan
Changed the line "there'll be no escape for the princess this time" to just "there'll be no escape this time" because when luke sees the hologram 3P0 doesn't know who she is.
Changed the line "there'll be no escape for the princess this time" to just "there'll be no escape this time" because when luke sees the hologram 3P0 doesn't know who she is.
Could this possibly be changed to "There'll be no escape for the Captain this time", this is how the line appearded in earlier scripts and the novelization (and maybe the radio play), obviously this refers to Captain Antillies the droids master, it just makes much more sense and will probably be less jarring to hear than your abreviated version (not that I've heard it).
Keep up the good work, can't wait to see more progress.