The clip you showed was great! A couple bits of feedback, though -- I thought two of the subtitles went by too quickly. The first was the "Stage No.6 at Elstree was immense [. . .] sound stage in Europe" one -- if you had left it on for even just another second or two, that would have been great. And since you have a bit of subtitle-less time after the note about the supermarket, it looks like it wouldn't be too big a deal to add that time. Also, the three-liner about the telepathic exchange seemed to be on-screen for a second or two too short.
Maybe I'm alone in thinking this -- I trust your judgment, my friend. Please do what you think is best. And this is not criticism in a negative way; just some feedback -- I loved what I was seeing! I can barely believe that this is one of the weakest parts -- if that's the case, we are in for something even more amazing than I had been expecting.
I can't wait . . . !
Take care,
Sojourn