Originally posted by: Commander Courage
I really like the direction of this project (the crawls sound great), but seeing as these are rather ambitious ideas, how do you plan on working them into the actual film? I am in total agreement that the Republic's use of the mysterious army from Kamino doesn't seem all that reasonable, but how can you work around that when the "mystery" aspect of the Clonetroopers is such an intregal part of the plot?

A good point. I guess in my edit, the "mystery" aspect of the film takes a back seat to the other plot elements (ie the love story, Anakin's taste of the dark side).

I actually think its going to work. I've cut completly the Dex's diner scene which is responsible for a large part of the 'mystery' plot. Instead I've used the Analysis Droids scene from the bonus disc. When scanned by the droids, the screen will (hopefully if I can pull it off) display that the dart comes from Kamino. And that to me will be the only mystery in the film. The audience is meant to think, "why is this bad guy linked to the cloners on Kamino?" But as Obi-Wan still explains in his transmission to Yoda and Mace "There appears to be no motive" which there isn't. Jango is simply a man for hire and has his fingers in many pies.

What was previously "the Clone trooper mystery" is now more exposition. Obi-Wan goes to Kamino in search of Jango and at the same time, the audience is shown the Clone army. Its not as creative or as subtle as what Lucas probably planned for the original film, but I prefer it this way rather than the horrendous manner in which it was executed originally.

I actually don't think the film really needs the mystery of the Clone Troopers. As the audience, all we need to know is that the Senate has made the decision some years ago to create the army because of the Separatist threat. I just can't help think when I watch AOTC that the entire Republic and the Jedi are completely stupid when suddenly a million troopers, that take years to grow, land in their lap, 5 mintues after Palpy says "I will create a grand army" and no-one stops to think where they've come from! It just doesn't work for me.

So, I hope in my edit I think I still suggest that the Cloner's are linked to Palpatine but far less obviously than in the original. The only link between them now, is the hired goon Jango. There are also lines spoken by both Obi-Wan and Mace in the film that will not be out of place, now that it has been established that everyone knows about the clone army. "You must realise there aren't enough Jedi to protect the Republic, we're keepers of the peace, not soldiers" and "I must admit that without the clones, it would not have been a victory". I think this way, with the changes I've made, the Jedi come across more willing to accept the army from the start (to help defend the Republic) than they would if it its creation was a mystery. I guess I like to think, while the dark side grows, the Jedi don't lose their intelligence or b*shit detector ability!

Sorry if its a convoluted reply, but hopefully I've explained what I'm trying to achieve.