Thanks for your thoughts guys.

Sluggo
The only item I have issue with is the commission of the clone army by the senate and the debate in the same senate over the same army. To me, it would make more sense to have Palpy outright order the creation of the army and leave the bickering to the senate. Unless you have bigger plans.

I think I still prefer the Senate being the ones who decide to create the army. I like the idea of all the Senator's being gripped by fear of Separatist attack and think that Palpy (and as Sidious behind the scenes), covertly manipulates things so the Senate end up making the decision.

Also Palpy, hasn't got emergency powers yet (he gets them at the end of the film as per the original film), hence I would need further explanation as to how he made this decision on behalf of the Republic independently of the Senate. Although I suppose I could ammend the crawl to state that Palpatine has already been given emergency powers....hmmm....