Well, in TM's versions "Shroud" has been squashed vertically to fit under the bar, which doesn't look good.
I think it'd look better coming from Klokwerk (using something better than MS Paint).
I just really don't like 9 and 10 as much, for whatever reason. Probably because the words "of the" are way too big. I don't know. I really like my No. 3 version and I'd love it if Klokwerk could do a high-quality mockup of that so we can better judge it. If that doesn't work, in my opinion the next best option is #4. I like No. 5 as well.
And I really do like that Ep. II conceptual painting.
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On a completely unrelated note, if hairy_hen is reading this, I'd like you to drop me a PM and just let me know what the timetable is. No pressure, but I'd just like to plan this out.
Thanks!
-TM