1) Slow the movement of the planet / camera / death star / star destroyer down a bit
- it appears to race by quite quickly and shows a bit too much "sliding" of objects rather than giving the impression of static solid objects in space - (best way I can describe it)
2) Lose the star destroyers in the background if not all together, there wasnt much need for a fleet as they had a Death Star!?
- The fleet appeared on a large scale in ESB in a Battlestar Galactica type of manner IMHO, including them makes you wonder what happended to them when the rebels attack later in the film!? Wouldnt the Empire have used them as frontline of defense if they were hovering by the Death Star when the rebels xwing fighters appear??. If they are there for show then the planet needs to be something worth hovering over....see next point
3) Change the colour of the planet - blue implies Alderaan which we dont see for another 30 mins (roughly!)
- Could the planet be Coruscant in the background rather than hovering over a blue unidentified planet in orbit, would this give the destoyers a reason to be there.
Please dont take this as critisicm, I cant wait for your edit to be finished, its bringing back that feeling of waiting to watch Star Wars for the first time when I was 10!!!! So keep up the good work.
Good bits, love the addition of the music in the Generals meetings, dont mind the imperial march too much in the Death Star fly by....