... Right, having watched ADM's cut of this scene (I don't have the original handy) there's a couple of long reaction shots on Shmi's face. Brilliantly, they are both when Anakin is talking, and both exactly when an extra line could be inserted to do the most good. This can definitely be done.
The second big scene with Anakin is his introduction to Padme, which is awful in raw TPM. This deserves editing just to make it presentable. Watching the ADM cut because I have it handy, his first "are you an angel" is said at such a range that it could be easily replaced with a different line, and his followup is spoken entirely on a reaction shot to Padme, then he goes into a non-sequiteur about being a pilot. Could this become "are you a akgjasldkgj [slang term for pilot]?" she says "Hnuh?", he says "A pilot. I'm a pilot, you know..." I mean, they've just turned up asking for spaceship parts, so this makes a lot more sense and eliminates the cringe. Is there enough Padme reaction to splice in when he's talking about "flying away from this place" a "and free *all* the slaves"? Anyway, this scene should establish Anakin as a precocious youngster, and also someone with ambition:
ANAKIN: Are you a sky surfer? [or whatever - any suggestions?]
PADME: Hnuh?
ANAKIN: A sky surfer. A pilot. I guess not. ... I'm a pilot. And someday, I'm gonna fly away from this place, and take my mom too.
PADME: You're a pilot? (this could be dubbed into something else - is Padme dubbed in SOTDS?)
ANAKIN: All my life (cringe)
PADME: How long have you been here?
ANAKIN: Since I was 3 yadda yadda yawn
PADME: You're a slave?
ANAKIN: I'm a person, and my name is Anakin.
PADME: I'm sorry.
*wipe to Qui-Gonn and Watto outside - they have their conversation*
*wipe back to inside*
*Padme and Anakin react to someone entering. Qui-Gonn returns*
PADME: I was glad to meet you, Anakin.
ANAKIN: I was glad to meet you too! (this is about the best exchange in this scene)
After that there's a little bit with Anakin and Sebulba that can be subtitled to be anything. I think this should show a kind of casual violence of language from Anakin (to a degree!), something that's harder-edged than anything anywhere else. Some hints as to what he'll grow up to be.
ANAKIN: Hey, Sebulba, I thought I told you you could only pick on people as ugly as yourself.
SEBULBA: Like you, Skywalker? Human children don't just look bad, they smell bad.
ANAKIN: Dude, whatever.
(please try and improve on this! My attempt bites)
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All comments and suggestions welcome.