Originally posted by: Erikstormtrooper
I humbly offer a reworded crawl...

Good try. As Laserman said, I think it needs to be even harder hitting. Something like:
"The Galactic Republic is crumbling. All eyes rest on the tiny backwater of Naboo, as the Galactic Trade Federation prepare to enslave the population with their army of droids. With the Republic Senate frozen in bureaucracy, the Jedi Council reluctantly send two juniors of its order to resolve the dispute.

Meanwhile, across the galaxy, an unsuspecting young slave's strange talents are about to come of age..."

I personally hate the crawls and Lucas's reliance on them to tell back story. Ideally they'd be as short as possible and run up the screen about three times as fast.