Here's a little bit of work i did, just a couple of pages. Very rough, but I think it's going in the right direction. I tried to incorporate some of the stuff you guys were talking about with a couple things of my own. I liked the idea of the Jedi being the police of the planet, with Mustafar being like a prison. However, to keep continuity, the Clone Wars had to have happened, so I figure why not just make them have occured in the past. Maybe Anakin having some 'Nam-esque flashbacks could add to his confusion and ultimately to his downfall. It also gives the Jedi a little bit more of a hypocritical side, which i thought was an interesting idea Lucas didn't really push enough. Perhaps the Jedi set up the war to get themselves more power, to gain popularity with the people. This betrayal could make Anakin turn on the Jedi, especially if he has awful memories of the war, and decide that the Sith and their freedom, their unrestrained power, is the better path to go down.

Anyway, let me know what you think.

FADE IN:

EXT. HAD ABADDON PRISON, NIGHT

A volcanic wasteland, lava flowing from many directions. The
camera eventually finds the burning body of Anakin Skywalker,
charred and black, he moans in pain.

ANAKIN (VO)
I never expected to end up here.
Taken convicts to this joint dozens
of times, never thought it'd be the
end of the line for me. These
volcanic spots are too unstable to
build on, not to mention how
unpleasant it is to be here anyway.
The Jedi stick their prisoners here.
Sure, we can't kill the bad guys,
but we can stick them in this hell
hole until they eventually take a
wrong step and end up in the hot
stuff. Just like I did. I ended up
just like everyone else the Jedi
think are "scum". No one else saw
what I saw. How I got here is a
long story, but it's one worth
telling. And it's looking like I
got all the time in the world.

EXT. HAD ABADDON CITY, DAY

A sprawling, huge city filled with bustling streets. The
highways reach far up into the skies. Ships and planes fly by.

ANAKIN (V0)
Had Abaddon. City of the Republic.
Policed by the Jedi Knights. Here
live the rich, the aristocrats, the
politicians. Since the Clone Wars
ended, Had Abaddon has become a
planet of peace and prosperity, the
main source of democracy in this
galaxy.

We now see flashes of battles and destruction, scenes from
various media involving The Clone Wars.

ANAKIN (V0)
The clone wars are forgotten much
too quickly. While the nation, the
Jedi, they all move on, I can't
help but remember the horrors I
witnessed. It was only a few years
ago after all.
2.

We now see Anakin with his wife, Padme.

ANAKIN (VO)
I've tried to move on, just like
everyone else. I have a wife now,
and a kid on the way.

Shots of Anakin fighting various bad guys, and various
villainous looking guys getting slammed behind bars.

ANAKIN (VO)
I police the city, take down the
criminals, the low lives, lock 'em
up in the joint. Protect the
citizens, preserve the peace.

Now we're showing Anakin doing various things involving the
force.

ANAKIN (VO)
When I'm not taking down who the
Jedi tell me to, Master Obi-Wan has
got me training, practicing,
improving my power over the force.
Apparently, I've got more potential
than any of the other Jedi. I'm
like their little science experiment,
their lab rat. Their secret weapon.