Just a tightened up version of your crawl, incorporating a few more elements of the original film's crawl.
Probably something along the lines of the crawl I'll use on Jedi.
The rebellion is doomed. The
Galactic Empire is nearing
completion of a new armored
battle station, even more powerful
then the first dreaded DEATH
STAR.
While the scattered remnants
of the Alliance are regrouping,
Luke Skywalker, has returned
to his home planet of Tatooine
to rescue his friend Han Solo
from the clutches of the vile
gangster Jabba the Hutt.
It is a perilous time for the
small band of rebels struggling
to restore peace and freedom
throughout the galaxy...