Pretty much all screenplays have business in them that might work on paper, but which becomes redundant with the visuals of film. It's all about knowing what to take out. In this case, I can see that business with Tack and the guards working in animation, but it fails at making him seem more heroic - if he does nothing, he's an innocent who's being harmed and Zigzag's ego becomes the focus.
Now:
The amazingly detailed logo for "Once ..."
In the N: Meemee and Yumyum (early versions), Tack (early version), Enchanted Prince Bubba, a Peacock, boots hanging in Tack's shop. The N tells the original two love stories of the film and sets up its environment.
In the C: Early Zigzag and Phido crawling out of the alligator pit, with early King Nod.
In the E: The Brigands including Roofless and Sgt. Hook, The Old Witch, a pointing finger, the hands of fate encircling the golden balls, flying ravens, dying soldier, arrows, Mighty One Eye.
Did I miss anything?
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