The minor one involves the landing. It just feels to long, and the cut to Qui-Gon and Obi-Wan inside the ship feels abrupt (plus that scene is kind of dull.) An idea I had that might spice it up just a little is to cut away from the landing half-way through and overlay the sounds for the rest of it over the Obi-Wan/Qui-Gon conversation. That way, instead of the conversation coming after the ship lands, it comes during the ships landing. I just think it adds a tad more urgency. Qui-Gon's not even waiting for the ship to land before he's getting ready to head out.
The second thing is my pair 'o pennies regarding Anakin's "Force Communication." I understand that something has to happen there, but I'm not sure the facial expressions work for Anakin "feeding thoughts to Padme." Just looking at the script, one idea thought is that it could work something like this:
Qui-Gon leaves.
Shot of Padme looking around.
Shot of Anakin staring at her.
Padme turns to look at Anakin and smiles.
Padme (thinking): You're a funny little boy.
Anakin: I'm a person.
Shot of Padme taken aback.
Padme: What?
Anakin: My name is Anakin.
Padme: I'm sorry. I don't fully understand. This is a strange world to me.
I'm not sure where to go from here. You could just cut away, or try to work the conversation back to "Are you an angel?" somehow. Or you could try a different conversation altogether. But I think having Anakin read Padme's mind will get the important messages across (Anakin is special, Anakin is connected to Padme), while fitting with the reactions better.
The original plan could still work. I just wasn't convinced by the rough cut, and thought I'd put an alternative idea out there.
Oh...definately get rid of the announcer. Gah!