REVIEW

I had a chance to watch this, and will share some thoughts.

I do not have the best expertise on this, but I did not notice any jarring cuts or audio issues considering all the cuts, rearrangements, and new audio inserted. That was a plus.

This edit was a fun and fast-paced movie. A major factor in this was the significant reductions in the action scenes. These were dragged out in the regular show, and I suspect because of the need to hit a minimum runtime. In a fan edit, that concern goes out the window.
I thought the AI voice change for Dryden’s character to match his live action counterpart was largely well done. I am not so sure that the reptilian voice for Daki adds anything positive or negative, but maybe someone else will find it interesting.
The complete removal of the Pykes subplot was done smoothly. Looking forward to season 2, I suspect we will not revisit the Pykes considering in the Solo movie Dryden mentions a tenuous truce with them. I suspect that means we will not see any further hostility from Maul against them. Therefore, it’s unlikely that removing the Pykes will be a problem in the future.
Removing the Mandolorian subplot was mostly well done. However, I did find their absence a bit jarring considering a large number of Maul’s gang just disappear at the end without explanation. I would be be curious to see if a first time viewer would notice their absence. Perhaps leaving a portion of them getting blown away could help this.
I think the tip to Lawson from Daki could be trimmed further. It came across as awkward that Lawson would flip flop on accepting the anonymous tips a few seconds after he was told that it was directed towards him. He can just accept it without dispute.
I did miss the Maul visions in the tunnels. These were not essential to the overall plot, but I thought added critical emotional depth to his character without needing to watch or read outside material. The childhood visions give critical insight into how Palatine abused Maul in his childhood that robbed him of his innocence. It demonstrates to the audience why Maul is a damaged person.
In my prior comment, I noted that I thought would miss some of the removed Lawson family material. After watching this, it was not as notable as I expected. You kept in just enough to avoid any plot holes or potential problems with the 2nd season as I suspect Mrs. Lawson and Riley will play much larger roles. I do believe more screen time for Riley and the one appearance by his mother could assist in setting them up for the future a little bit better. However, this material contradicts your stated goal of focusing on Maul and Devon.

Overall, this was a nice cinematic experience. From the opening crawl to the closing with the standard Star Wars credit music. I enjoyed this and hope others can give this a chance as well. Thank you for sharing and keep up the great work.

As an aside your poster/thumbnail is looks awesome. What is your method of adding the thumbnail to a video file?