CUT TO:
INT COCKPIT
Seeing the same Tatooine matte painting through the windshield
Qui Gonn instructs them to land near outskirts NOT
CHANGE: Qui Gonn dialogue replace: "Space ports like this one are havens for people who don't wish to be found." Use instead of "land near the outskirts."
EXT. TATOOINE
The ship lands
INT. QUEEN"S THRONE ROOM
(It will take good dialogue mixing to make this scene work, but it will save us so much dead weight and activate a pretty dead scene, check it out
Jedi, Artoo and Panaka stand before Queen. (I know the R2 damage has already been repaired, so let's not see him as much as possible) Use master shot first, but instead of hearing the Queen talk, we hear Qui Gonn dialogue as if his report is in progress--"...Tatooine, [cut] Your highness. It's..."
Med shot of Qui GOnn: "...in a system far beyond the reach of the Trade Federation."
On Queen, her placid reaction: "Padme" she says. Padme crosses out from behind her...
Close on Qui Gonn, observing silently
On Queen: "Continue, Captain." Panaka turns to Qui Gonn : "Her highness...
On Panaka (shot as he says "I do not agree..." etc. sync as well as possible): "...commands you to take her handmaiden with you." [ Cut away when the non-sync gets too obvious]
Back to Master using this angle to cover the rest of Panaka's dialogue as he finishes
Close on Qui Gonn (from when he says "trust me") his reaction is not defiant, but not happy -- "This is not a good idea..." he says. Try it a couple different ways to get the most resigned, but pessimistic reaction on his face. CUT TO (eliminate wipe)
INT. SHIP
Qui Gonn passes Obi Wan working on the hyperdrive. Use scene as is -- a disturbance in the Force. No communications. QG leaves and we a NEW THEME begins to play as we WIPE TO
EXT. TATOOINE
...It's the "TATOOINE THEME" for Ep 1. InfoDroid, give us good Tatooine music like the droid hike in ANH -- maybe the same theme -- as this whole sequence all the way into Watto's shop is without dialogue and played for musical intro to Tatooine.
Crop all shots so we can't see the city in the distance.
Long Shot of QG, JJ, and R2
Med shot of same as they turn, reacting to someone behind them
Long shot of Panaka leading Padme -- crop out the ship behind them
CU Shot of Qui Gonn's face emoting "this is not a good idea"
Med Shot of QG starting to walk again and Padme following as Panaka stays (crop out ship again)
Long shot of QG, JJ, P and R2 walking toward distance (crop out city)
Dissolve to same shot cropped different: this time shot is jus the horizon with the city, no figures walking in the foreground. WIPE TO
QG leading group into town -- up to a point where two figures cross dramatically in the foreground (right before JJ steps in dog doo) -- CUT To
QG et al walking straight toward camera, QG stops before us and looks screen left. CUT to
The flipped/reversed second half of this shot (minus a little movement at the head) so that QG leads the group screen left toward some buildings -- CUT TO
The Long Shot rising second half of the "walking into town shot" -- picking up where it feels natural in terms of how close JJ is to the troup. We pull up and back, seeing the whole city swallow them -- CUT TO
INT. WATTO'S GARAGE
Watto hums the Cantina theme from ANH -- the door "pings" and Qui Gonn enters...
A more adventerous intro to Mos Espa -- more majestic, especially if you imagine that haunting theme from ANH -- Is there a good reason we can't use the same music?
Anyway -- that's all for now. More soon.