I’m surprised that there aren’t any reviews of Episode 3 yet, because … it’s absolutely brilliant again! The pacing in the first half in particular feels much better than in the original episodes. 😃 We, as viewers, are now staying tuned on all the storylines, and the connection between the wedding and the events on Mina-Rau in particular creates a very nice contrast. Personally, I didn’t miss the scenes on Yavin at all. And I also found the time jumps to be hardly noticeable. The kind of mentioning of the time jumps felt unneccessary in the original to me when viewing it at first. But your edit really shows that viewers hardly question the different passing of time when the scenes are edited together appropriately. It just feels like a very well-rounded movie — very well done! 😃

A few things caught my attention, but these are really just minor details:

09:19: Krennic’s voice is a tad too quiet in the first sentence (‘Gorman is of great interest to the empire’).
24:40: The music piece that starts when Mon walks off feels a bit cut off. The transition to the next song (24:50) is great in itself, but the piece before that feels somehow incomplete.
25:52: Here the music from the wedding party feels cut off again, for my taste it’s a bit too abrupt.
27:00: Is there any chance to stretch Cassian’s scene in the TIE? It feels to me like it would benefit from more breathing room to really grasp as an audience what happens here, since we haven’t seen him for a while.
47:30: The here mentioned ‘freighter’ is news to the audience, if I hadn’t miss anything. I’m not sure what a solution for this could be, but it somehow caught me off guard, since Cassian was only flying the TIE up to this point.
1:07:17: Not something specific, but the chapter ‘Noble Sacrifice’ had too much back and forth from the wedding to the imperial investigation on Mina-Rau. Especially the last bit with Cassian and Bix could have gone longer for my taste. In addition to that I felt like the imperials were a little less intimating without Bix’s encounters with them before.
1:34:12 Bix’s mentioning of the boy Cassian killed, because he had seen her face, feels a bit off, since we never saw the nightmare of her before. This was a bit jarring in the original episode as well, but here the audience lacks even more information about that incident.
2:48:13 Is it possible to stay a little longer at the rebels on Ghorman? For the kind of loss we just saw, my feeling was, that the scene needs more breathing room.