There's a hell of a lot of stuff there -- I have only gotten a few pages in!
Question: You often have competing versions of the same scene clipped together -- how do we know which one you're going with?
One response so far -- (aside from loving everything) -- I see a place where my suggestion got lost in translation (I think). When Anakin goes to Padme's bedroom to watch her pack there is enough material for a useful romantic scene if most of the scene is cut away. Although the notes contain many ideas for this scene (including cutting it entirely) -- I don't see the following idea:
Just use the following bit:
P:I do not like this idea of hiding
A: Sometimes we must let go of our pride and do what is requested of us
P: Anakin, you’ve grown up
End with a shot of Anakin accepting this compliment with grace and then one of Amidala finally "getting it." She's right and he knows it and he's cool enough to let it be evident -- letting it be the first moment of romance between these to. It's the "glance" -- the scene where the reluctant lover first sees something interesting in her pursuer's eyes.
I think the notes conclude that this scene should be cut -- that's why I felt like pointing out the potential again.
But I don't know if I'm reading the notes right... Am I?
Great work anyway!
Happy Holidays!