For what it’s worth, here’s my two cents on how to address that problem: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1ml90rgWBTyGyIv0d2pM0xU-foauZ_Esp/view?usp=sharing
To me, the “I hate them!” line isn’t over done. . . cause it’s his mom. . . My mom broke her ankle in the Grand Canyon, and I’ve never been so ready to fight a National Park in my life!
I feel like your version mayb trims the scene of him and Padme a little much, I for one really like the dialogue about life “seeming so much simpler fixing things”, though could use some trims.
Did both a version based on my own tastes, cutting out the Obi-Wan dialogue, simply having him state he wish he was all powerful, and exploding into “I HATE THEM!”.
And then a ver based on the original idea, instead focusing on the idea that he “SHOULD BE” all powerful, but Obi-Wan is holding him back, before sinking onto the floor. More trims than the original prompt but again my interpretation.
I feel the latter came out cleaner, couldn’t really find much material to work with for the former idea.