+1 on cutting Krennic and Jyn’s dialogue beyond “Who are you?”
“Who are you?”
close up of Jyn’s face when Krennic is saying “I lose nothing but time.”
close up of krennic as he is shot
maybe Galen shouldn’t be able to share any words with his daughter either. She just runs up to him and he’s already gone. “Nothing you can do about that.”
I support removing any tension at all between Jyn and Cassian. Of course them looking at eachother in the elevator but him getting close and saying “welcome home” might be too far, too. Maybe trim some of Cassian holding Jyn back from krennic, too.
Plus the music during the last minutes of episode three should probably also be swapped out. There’s probably something from season 2 that would fit really well.
Also during Cassians big speech in episode 2 I think you should edit out Jyn’s sarcastic “I appreciate the support.” to let Diego have his big moment. The shots around a later reaction shot of Jyn are taken from the same take and edit seamlessly together if you still need to cut away for continuity.