Ok, well I’ll just jot my thoughts down as I watch some of the episodes (I’m jumping around a bit). I’ll mainly be commenting on parts where the seams of the edit is noticeable in one way or another:
The New Padawan:
I thought this overall looks great. A lot of the problems I had with the version from early 2022 look fixed. The only small thing that stuck out to me is that at 18:07 you can tell that Yoda’s lips keep moving to finish the sentence after “Then go with you she will…”. I’m not sure if it’d be possible to cut away to make it less noticeable.
Children of the Night
At 5:26, it feels a bit unnatural for the conversation to cut off suddenly like that. Even though I don’t really remember the original episode, I could tell there was supposed to be another beat of “But sir, we’d hit Ventress”. It’s a minor point, and mainly rooted in script writing convention rather than editing itself.
By cutting out Asajj telling the salvagers to bring her to Dathomir, and their response of “nothing there but witches”, the audience is left not knowing where they are or who these people are when Asajj goes there. I assume this was intentional to build mystery, but generally it’s good to know the name of the planet we’re on or at least a general idea of who the people we’re seeing are. That brief intro makes sure the viewer doesn’t think they’re supposed to already know who/what they are. I assume that’s why the original episode included those lines. The twist is still preserved for the few minutes before we realize that Asajj is one of them.
It’s jarring to go straight from the Dathomir brother selection to the final test. The dialog/pacing feels unnatural (“let the game begin” isn’t so much of a phrase as “let the games begin”, and you have one scene end with the word “begin” immediately followed by the next scene beginning with the same word.) I see in the notes that you wanted to focus more on just Savage and Feral, but I think something is lost by not showing them making their way through the trials. Them being the only ones selected is a bit too coincidental, plus the trials themselves are just really fun.