Just Finished watching it. Really enjoyed it, superb pacing, and very engaging. 2 suggestions would be: when Fern and KB meet Win and Neil, and then Win says "you!’ it just feels off. I feel like you could skip to when fern says: the name’s Fern. Just a thought. Also, some of the wipe transitions are a bit quick from scene to scene, such as when Fern says: I guess we’re splitting up. The wipe comes a bit too quickly in my opinion. Otherwise, FANTASTIC JOB smudger9!!!
Thanks for the feedback. Glad you enjoyed it.
The Wim-Fern “you-me” is how it plays out in the series. It’s a bit corny, but I quite like it and it immediately shows us their relationship… rivals.
Good point on the splitting up transition. It’s actually an L-cut rather than a wipe but it is a bit sharp. I wanted to end the scene on Fern’s line because its a stronger scene exit. However, there is an immediate cut to KB after she finishes her line. I’ve gone back and added in KB’s response “fine” which allows a better paced transition.