I overall agree with this. My only changes would be:
TFA: Cut down some of the ratthar (sp?) attack.
TLJ: Cut Leia slapping Poe. If their genders were changed in ANY way, the slap would never happen.
Also, split some of the Canto Bight scenes in between the other set pieces instead of it happening in one long block. That gives it time to breathe, and integrates it with the rest of the action, as opposed to seeming like an outlier.
It’s really down to personal preference, honestly. I enjoy the Rathtar sequence so I left it mostly intact, and I think spreading Canto Bight out actually makes it worse, because you lose any pacing or momentum that the sequence is building.