tjdavis1138 -- WOW! That's generosity! That's speed! Welcome, welcome!

Incredible to see these ideas coming in. I would caution this thread against posting too many clips too quickly -- rough versions can get picked apart and good will can be lost if we rush. I seen it happen! 8-0

Originally posted by: tjdavis1138
Commander, I agree.

The droid shot in the middle of the scene really kills it. Would have been nice to see the entire landing. Oh well.

What if this: shorten the interruption -- just give us a glimpse of the droids; then back to the landing as it finishes -- then the rest of the droid shot, which is a reaction -- their bodies begin to move forward-- cut to the doorway --

just an idea to keep the landing more like one piece, and the droids as a final shot should be cued with tense music-- this is not a happy welcome committee

Here's a link to the **official**

extremely rough first cut. I haven't played much with blending the music or anything yet.

Awesome. So much help to see the jedi inside the approaching ship. I might try cutting a little more on movement in one shot (trim a little off the front of the wide shot so she's already moving) and getting out of the Qui Gonn shot before the co-pilot moves so he matches the next shot. Did you try a bit of the next shot, the med shot of just the captain moving toward the controls? I always thought it would help this little sequence feel more complete -- with a sound f/x of her clicking a button.

Can we cut "Captain" from Q's line? Makes it faster and more commanding. (Ahh! Stopping. Sorry.)

You said it was rough-- I probably shouldn't comment. Great work! I wish I had more script right now.