Anyway, I LIKES.
The new shot of the worms is much appreciated and the cues are great for building up real suspense there.
I think I have a couple knit-picks, if you want to entertain them (ignore if not)
1. I'd like the worm shots to reverse -- so the order goes from bad to worse -- the moving worms on Padme's arms are not biting, so I'd show them first, THEN cut to the biting worm.
2. I think there are three beats that take too long -- 1. Anakin crossing the room, I'd cut on movement so he only spins his blade once to get from the door to the worms. Currently it spins twice before he's there. 2. I'd cut the "smoking" worm carcass shot so we don't hold on that so long and get Padme to wake up quicker. She takes too long now and it bothers me (maybe no one else, but me). 3. Obi Wan takes too many steps before going out the window -- he should see the droid, take one step and LEAP!! That'll shorten the shot of Anakin with Obi Wan in the background.
I think these snips will make the sequence keep the great sense of suspense and danger you've managed. I hope they help. I love seeing your work!
Edited to add: I'm a f*ckin' idiot -- I didn't even get the point of the post -- that's RAIDERS? It's perfect! Great job!