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Post #1622539

Author
Hal 9000
Parent topic
Star Wars Episode I: Cloak Of Deception (Released)
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Date created
2-Jan-2025, 3:42 PM

I agree, Fixing4 sounds great! At least in isolation.

That 3PO line feels off somehow. Not sure how you can ‘direct’ the performance. But the line oughtta end in a way befitting a head nod of satisfaction. Also, it read it pretty quickly so it could be wordier maybe.

Maybe “I must say, Mistress Padme, space travel is much more enjoyable during peacetime.”

Thank you for taking time for this!