Yeah, after seeing Episode 3 I think it’s best to remove it. I wasn’t sure if they were going to immediately reveal his true identity or not, but since they’re dragging it on for so long it’s probably best to at least make him somewhat mysterious.
From this episode specifically, you could easily remove the following:
- The intro scene since it serves no purpose
- The kids and Jude Law going BACK through the pirates to reach the shuttle. Just cut shortly after he mentions the unguarded tunnel or something. This feels like Obi-Wan hiding Leia under his cloak all over again, because there shouldn’t be ANY children in the pirate base, and they should all kinda know that the only kids there are supposed to be in prison. Makes his character seem like an idiot.
- All of Jude Law’s scenes when he goes back to retrieve the droid - this way we don’t learn his true pirate nature from the goon that catches him. Plus, all of his action scenes here were cut (or never filmed), anyways.
- The scene where the owl lady calls in the X-Wings. This way we discover what she did at the same time as Jude Law’s character.
That’s just what came to me immediately after seeing the episode. I’m sure there would be more.
I spent this afternoon editing episode 3, and here’s what I’ve done:
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I kept the opening scene but moved it to where the crew is traveling to the moon. The events on At Attin will form the B-plot of the series and will likely be crucial in the crew finding their way back. I plan to intersperse scenes focused on the parents as they uncover the planet’s secrets throughout the A-plot.
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I agree that the crew’s escape is similar to the Fortress Inquisitorius sequence in Kenobi. I’ve incorporated Yod offering the characters two options - the “quiet way” or the “busy way.” Fern chooses the quiet way, and KB warns them of an approaching guard. Fern then jokes that KB must be a Jedi, and Yod says the Force resides in everyone, leading to a cut to the characters on the ferrycraft, implying they took the quiet route.
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I’ve kept the scene of Yod finding SM33 but only until Yod says, “I’ll take that as a yes then.” I used a reverse shot of Yod activating SM33 to make the cut work better, and I’ve removed the Ishi Tib pirate.
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I’ve cut the SM-33 - Yod scene back on the ship, as it didn’t add much.
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I’ve removed the Owl contacting the New Republic.
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I’ve made a few other minor adjustments to tighten the pacing, most notably the escape from the fuel line.
The first three episodes now clock in at 1 hour and 15 minutes.