My favorite edit of Obi-Wan so far is the Pentex Edit, but I’d be curious to check out your cut. I like the idea of keeping a small portion of the Leai chase scene. I made a personal edit of that chase scene myself and I thought it worked fairly when it was cut it in half or so:
https://www.reddit.com/r/fanedits/comments/vidmmr/leia_chase_scene_rough_cut/