Nice notes, thanks. The second film’s crawl had a lot of exposition, I like your ideas to trim it down a bit. Crosshair’s arc would change a little for that omission, his implied reason for turning on the Empire would be their betraying him by imprisoning and questioning him, rather than their overall treatment of the clones. But ultimately the result is the same.
Your suggestions for additions to film 1 make a lot of sense to incorporate more of what viewers of the show like or know is going on bigger picture. For the most part, I’m happy letting the viewer fill in little blanks like that. Lord knows the main saga do it plenty. But establishing Cid somewhere before film 2 would be good. Honestly I hoped to cut her entirely but she has that one key scene in the second film, so I made do with the crawl 😂