I like it, but it does seem to move just a bit too quickly. What would it look like with Qui-Gon’s shot added back in? Or, at least a portion of it?
Here it is with Qui-Gon added back in.
https://drive.google.com/file/d/1WeYilZ9jDaNj1078P6xXRTa7zllELkia/view?usp=drive_link
I don’t think it works as well because Obi-Wan moves to the right, then Qui-Gon moves to the left, then they are together going into the vent. The other way, the way I had it before, Obi-Wan sees the destroyers and flees to the right, then they go to the vent on the right, all in in one movement.