I finally saw your clip -- and I love it. Your cut of the action is much more to my taste than the previously posted version. The mix seems similarly "hot" on music though. I think the comments by Commander Courage are accurate -- the build and release of the music feels rushed, especially as the droids walk and when Han takes off. The moment when Ben dies needs a pause, I think. Some quiet for Luke to shout into. THe original cues from ANH were damn good, I always thought. It's just that for the Saga, most of your music choices are better.
Good work!