Thanks for the feedback-- there will be a time when someone will have to "break the tie" and that's likely going to be you. Glad you like my script to a degree. You say:
InfoDroid: "I will say, MTHaslett, your version has very good potential, and we may go with a version of it, but as it stands, it's a little too close to the original structure for me."
...And I must ask for clarification. What is wrong with the original "structure?" The problem I always had was that Obi Wan lies -- not the structure of the scene. I agree with Lucas that it seems weird for them to start by listening to a call to arms from Princess Leia and responding by sitting around telling stories and exchanging gifts.
So I can maybe make suggestions, can you say what would be an improved structure?
Long live "the Ranch!"